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| THE best Americans alive ♥ |
Despite the walk, it was still a great trip. All the pictures we took were memories being captured. And the thing I've learnt out of this experience is that every moment is a memory in the making, so why not make the best of what we've got. Even if it's just a cheap lodge room with spiders and frogs [:
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ViVi: I'm gona go suicide in the pond kay?
Kris: no one cares :) |
But there were so much more indescribable memories I had in Cat Tien; the late-night laughs with Kristine & Darlene, the blasting of music out of my speakers in our block, the private times talking around the campfire, the visible stars illuminating the sky at night, the peaceful walks from this room to that... Every single moment of it was unforgettable. If I were to retell the whole experience, I would've done it without hesitation (:
3 comments:
For my word choice I think I did okay with choosing synonyms of dead words to make my writing more impressive. I didn't overdo my vocabulary and made it sound as if I put together a bunch of complicated words to make myself sound smart. psh (:
My sentence fluency I think went along well. The words glide off the tip of my tongue and onto the next sentence, and it doesn't sound like a bunch of nonsense I put together.
For proofreading, ohmygod, like I've read it over & over just to make sure its flawless. But i'm pretty sure you can find mistakes if you strain your eyes. It just seems flawless for the moment.
My spelling and grammar I think are fine. Because grammar comes naturally to me I think I know when something sounds wrong. And spelling, sure I had to check the dictionary.
Overall, I think I deserve a 11.5/12 ♥
Your vocabulary, organization, and sentences are very good. I think u will have the maximum score.
I really like the pictures. :))
I think you used quite good words for your description. They are not too repetitive, but you used a lot of verbs and adjectives that really painted a picture for me.
Your sentences have a variety of sentence beginnings, which is great. The whole thing sounds really good when read aloud.
There is obvious organization in your narrative. It is ordered in chronological order and quite easy to follow.
There are some grammar mistakes such as "If I were to retell," but obvious, there is a lot of proofreading, and the mistakes don't really interrupt the flow of the paragraph. I think this essay will score really high marks. I think it gets a 11.5/12.
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